Maybe its a poem

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Emerald Skyz (3/28/04 1:50 am) Reply	Maybe its a poem Defeated I was there when you were born Beside your cradle and you were a baby And you are hurt and torn apart and scorned And I know that you've gone crazy How was I to know when you would smile at me That even you cannot be saved? It seems that I know what you can't see Go ahead and dig your grave
Iunknwon (3/29/04 12:43 pm) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem yep, seems like a poem to me. ... and i liked it too! .. sad, though ... *Quote:* How was I to know when you would smile at me That even you cannot be saved? hmmm... good lines.
Emerald Skyz (3/30/04 12:30 am) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem Thank you. I suppose it is sad... normally things I write are kinda funny. But most of it isn't poetry.
Iunknwon "west coast jade-d" (3/30/04 1:48 am) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem *Quote:* Thank you. I suppose it is sad... normally things I write are kinda funny. But most of it isn't poetry. i don't write that much of anything .... don't usually deal in words as'art' wahtever .... well, not 'til lately ... but writing poetry can be good 'cause you can get a lot into a little space (and time hopefully...). Good almost rhymin' effect, btw - forgot to mention that part of it before ....
chaelosm voice ...learning, and living. (4/1/04 6:43 pm) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem Maybe it was the title but for some reason when I read it, I saw it as a poem you were talking about (being there for its "birth" when it was written, having it scorned and picked apart by others, and ultimately being thrown away) -- I doubt that's the analogy you meant but it was cool to read it that way. Thanks for sharing this, Emerald Skyz.
Emerald Skyz (4/3/04 1:56 am) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem hmm... you know that works. But its about this kid I knew. She didn't thrive well in any environment. Eventually she just turned everything inward. Now she is just bitterly sad. And I hate it, but there is nothing I can do. I never mean to do the almost rhymes. I mean for them to rhyme, but they don't.
Iunknwon "west coast jade-d" (4/3/04 4:27 am) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem *Quote:* I never mean to do the almost rhymes. I mean for them to rhyme, but they don't. The effect suits the theme of the piece though. And yeah, sometimes, when you write poems, stuff happens that is even cooler than you intended, right?
Emerald Skyz (4/3/04 11:46 pm) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem Yeah I think thats true. Thank you.
Sugar Mtn Honeybee just landed (4/7/04 5:53 pm) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem When I read this poem, it was like it exactly expressed my feelings towards someone I knew for many years and then they got into drugs, and there was nothing I could do to help them.. It's a great poem.. I loved it.
Emerald Skyz (4/20/04 8:32 pm) Reply	Re: Maybe its a poem Same here. Only hers were legal. Thanks.

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