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lithium22
dirty alternative rocker girl.
Posts: 30
(7/29/04 3:37 am)
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My Poem
As usual
You take me for a fool
Ignore me
And asure me
That I'm pointless
I might as well just die
But you still want to see me fry
In the universe there is no room for me
Pull the trigger
Send me to infinty

No puctuation, decided I'll add it later...

he1ter ske1ter
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Posts: 21
(7/29/04 9:09 pm)
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Re: My Poem
It's really good, and there's lots of feeling to it. Nice job. Just one suggestion, the "die" and "fry" seem too rhymy, ya know? Cool poem overall.

lithium22
dirty alternative rocker girl.
Posts: 34
(7/29/04 11:52 pm)
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Re: My Poem
thanks alot Helter! i will try to fix it up, and thanks for using our banner.

kerrigan in shadow
pen cap chewer.
Posts: 25
(8/3/04 10:48 pm)
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Re: My Poem
now that is deep! great work lithium

lithium22
dirty alternative rocker girl.
Posts: 61
(8/3/04 11:17 pm)
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Re: My Poem
thanks kerrigan!

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