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Missy Jadewitch
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(7/26/06 9:27 am)
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"The Great Adventure" review thread
All reviews for the "Great Adventure" should go here, lovelies...
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CaCire10
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(7/26/06 10:30 am)
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Re: "The Great Adventure" review thread
First of all, hip-hip-hooray for our first OLTL fic! Thanks, Missy J!
Second of all, I love your writing style—no, I flove it! Like this:
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I had a bad experience… if you want to learn more, just ask Natalie because I have no comment about one spring day in my sixth year of innocent-as-the-freshly-fallen snow childhood. And, no matter what Natalie may say, it’s a complete lie when she says that I screamed like a girl.
Sexy Rexy does not scream like a girl.
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Rex does not know why he continues to refer to himself in the third person.
You had me ROTFL right from the start. (Let me preface the rest of my comments by saying that I’m an on-again/off-again OLTL fan, and although I know all the characters, I don’t know the s/ls.) Okay, moving on:
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Bracing himself, he stepped out, closing the door behind him and quickly darting forward to grab the handle of her luggage, noting the brush of his fingertips against hers. Ignoring the slight jump of his stomach, he took it out of her hold, unlocking the trunk and tossing it into, regretting it when he heard something that sounded expensive shatter into a million little shards of something no longer expensive.
Again, I just love your phrasing, the picture you create, and the humor you invoke here.
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Protecting him from Dorian counted as caring, right?
And that would have to be a big, resounding “Yes!”
I have a feeling following their adventures from Rex’s POV is going to be a lot of fun. Looking forward to your next update!
Edited by: CaCire10 at: 7/26/06 10:31 am
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kzinlove06
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(7/26/06 10:56 am)
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Re: "The Great Adventure" review thread
Damn CC... you quoted all of my favorite parts as well!! I guess that is what I get for showing up late for the party.. well actually I was early and then distracted, but I diagress...
So I'll quote this part as well...
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Bo has told me to start documenting my cases and advised that I start some kind of diary. Sexy Rexy does not have a diary, he is far too sexy for that, I tell you. However, he does not object to keeping a journal or some kind of captain’s log. This, therefore, is the captain’s log of Rex Balsom.
Yeah... captain's log. Far more manly. tee hee.
I absolutely love fun adventure fics and I can't wait to see where you lead us on this one.
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kzinlove06
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(8/2/06 8:07 am)
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Re: "The Great Adventure" review thread
The captain's log still has me cracking up.
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Grimacing, almost limping, she set her eyes on the gas station in the distance, a beautiful sight of neon light and cheap food, and, catching sight of a deal for a large drink for only seventy-five cents, she couldn’t fight the soft squeal that escaped her, a giddy noise of relief as she performed a quick little dance step, not caring how much it hurt her already aching feet.
Depending on how far she walked in those Manolo's, I think the only thing she would have been happier to see would have been a day spa where she could have dropped in for a foot rub while Sexy Rexy gassed up the car!
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She took a small step to the right, letting him pass her as he made a beeline towards the slushie machine in the back of the store, and let her eyes stay on the creepy chick who was eying Rex like a piece of meat.
Ugh. These chick's really piss me off and always show up at the most unexpected of times and the description alone made me want to see Adriana reach right over the counter and clock her.
Still loving the adventure and very much looking forward to the next update!
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CaCire10
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(8/2/06 10:11 am)
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Re: "The Great Adventure" review thread
I am loving the Captain's Log, too. Sexy Rexy cracks me up! This is a lot of fun! Can't wait for the next update.
And you're making me want to tune into OLTL.
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